ابي لوسمحتم تصححون لي مقالي انا كاتبتهبسرعه لازم بكرا اسلمه ولكم مني دعوهMy admire
All people have character admire of him or her. Some people admire with parents them or brother or sister or teacher them.
I admire my father from the first I depend on him in my life. He is a police man. He passionate about life and learn. He is love read book in any time. His personality is strong but he is very kind. Always He gives me advice. He solves all my problems. He helps me in my study because he knows the English language. He is very kind hearted and merciful. He helps other people when they need for him .we find him behind us in the difficult times.
My father is very patient I see that in him when my grandfather and my grandmother died together in the accident. He was just all time remember Allah and ask Allah for them the paradise. I like my father. He was teaching me many useful things in life. Thankful my father on all what did you for me.
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لحلمي حكايه
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رفع
تــــــــــــكفون ساعدوني بس ابي تصحيح وربي لدعيلها الي بتفرجها لي وتصححه الله يفرجها على قلبها ويسعدها بكرا تبيه دكتورتنا بليز
أم_رنومة
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عندك اخطاء مرة تستخدمي المضارع البسيط ومره تستخدمي التام ومره تستخدمي الماضي
والاسلوب شوي مو مرتب
ايش رايك تكتبي
I admire my father because he is a good person he says good things and give goods advice. he has
a strong personality. i admire him. I like many things in my life for example my relatives. in special my mother, father and my brother too.
وللاضافة
شوفي هالرابط ممكن يساعدك
http://www.experienceproject.com/stories/Admire-My-Father/100532
والاسلوب شوي مو مرتب
ايش رايك تكتبي
I admire my father because he is a good person he says good things and give goods advice. he has
a strong personality. i admire him. I like many things in my life for example my relatives. in special my mother, father and my brother too.
وللاضافة
شوفي هالرابط ممكن يساعدك
http://www.experienceproject.com/stories/Admire-My-Father/100532
اولا سلام عليكم
ثانيا عندي لك نصيحه . حاولي تقصير الجمله علشان تكون مفهومه وصحيه زي ام رنومه
مثلا : انت كاتبه
I admire my father from the first I depend on him in my life
انت ودك تقول انا معجبه ببوي من الاول واعتمد عليه في حياتي
جملت حلووووه ماشاء الله لكن اغلي from the first
I admire my father and i depend on him >>>>>>>>>etc
or
first, i admire >>>>>>>>etc
هنا لاحظي :
some people have character make others admire or like him/her so that people might be their parent,brothers,sister or their teacher
وش رايك .........اقري الجملتين وشوفي ايهم اقنع
نكمل تصحيح ..........
الباقي سليم ماشاء الله لكن اقرية انت اكثر من مره بتركيز راح تلاحظين اشياء ناقصه وبعض القواعد
ثانيا عندي لك نصيحه . حاولي تقصير الجمله علشان تكون مفهومه وصحيه زي ام رنومه
مثلا : انت كاتبه
I admire my father from the first I depend on him in my life
انت ودك تقول انا معجبه ببوي من الاول واعتمد عليه في حياتي
جملت حلووووه ماشاء الله لكن اغلي from the first
I admire my father and i depend on him >>>>>>>>>etc
or
first, i admire >>>>>>>>etc
هنا لاحظي :
some people have character make others admire or like him/her so that people might be their parent,brothers,sister or their teacher
وش رايك .........اقري الجملتين وشوفي ايهم اقنع
نكمل تصحيح ..........
الباقي سليم ماشاء الله لكن اقرية انت اكثر من مره بتركيز راح تلاحظين اشياء ناقصه وبعض القواعد
مشكورررررررررررره أم جودي والله يوفقك ويفرج لك قسم فرحني ردك ماقصرتي والحمدلله رفعتي من معنوياتي وان كتابتي كويسه الله يحرم يدينك من النار وياليت لو اقدر اتواصل معك عالخاص عشان تفيديني اذا احتجت شي وشكرآ
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