صبااااااااح الخير
كيفكمــ
بليييز بناااتـ حريمـ امهاتـ
ابي احد يصحح لي النصـ
مو شرط تكونين معلمهـ لكن ابي احد يشوف لي اغلاطي الي كتبتها بالنص هذا
In last weekend my air condition did not work I ask my brother to mend
It but he was busy….
In up stairs we have empty room next to my sisters' room…..my mother
said" how about change your room?" …"amm… it is nice idea" I
Said….befor one day I started move my furniture "bed, desk, chair,
…est. ..." to my new room and I cleaned it with my sisters ……I put my
bed under the window and my desk near the door and my wardrobe
Next to my bed….I change my bedcover to pink color…and I change
The color of lights ….now I am finish. wow I have simple relax room..
When my brother came to my cold room he said "oh-ah beautiful room
We have great mother she keep me relaxed and make some changes for
You"
يلا الله يخليييييييييييييييكمـ
بدخل على 9 ابي اشوف احد مصحح ومبدي رأيه وانتقادهـ
يالبى قلبه* @yalb_klbh
محررة برونزية
يلزم عليك تسجيل الدخول أولًا لكتابة تعليق.
umothman
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ممكن اصحح شوي من جمل الأخت DAISIES
instead of saying "in the upstairs"
u should say "upstairs" only
>>>>>>>>>
"mother suggested"
should be " my mother suggested"
>>>>>>>>>
these two sentences "Yesterday before l started moving its furniture;bed, desk, chairs....etc., to my new room with my sisters helping me. l placed ( put) the bed under the window; the desk near the door and the wardrobe next to my bed"
you should join them in one sentence like this : " yesterday before i started moving its furniture to my new room with the help of my sisters, I placed the bed under the window.
أرجو إنه يكون صح علي وأكون أفدتك :)
instead of saying "in the upstairs"
u should say "upstairs" only
>>>>>>>>>
"mother suggested"
should be " my mother suggested"
>>>>>>>>>
these two sentences "Yesterday before l started moving its furniture;bed, desk, chairs....etc., to my new room with my sisters helping me. l placed ( put) the bed under the window; the desk near the door and the wardrobe next to my bed"
you should join them in one sentence like this : " yesterday before i started moving its furniture to my new room with the help of my sisters, I placed the bed under the window.
أرجو إنه يكون صح علي وأكون أفدتك :)
مشكووورين الله يسعدكمـ يااااااااااااربـ
عطيت وحده وطلعت الاخطاء تشبهـ اخطاء الي طلعتوها ليــ
لكن هي ماغيرت بالكلمات
بس كلمة mend حطتها fixed
يعطييييييكم العافيه ياااحوووبي لكمـ
الصفحة الأخيرة
Last weekend, my air conditioner was out of order (عطلان)
so, l asked my brother to repair it.but unfortunately, he was so busy.We had an empty room in the upstairs,next to my sister's. "How about changing the room", mother suggested, 'That's a nice idea', l replied.Yesterday before l started moving its furniture;bed, desk, chairs....etc., to my new room with my sisters helping me. l placed ( put) the bed under the window; the desk near the door and the wardrobe next to my bed. l changed ( altered ) the colour of the bedcover or bedspread into pink. l changed the colours of the lights, too.Now, l finished everything, "Wow what a simple relaxing room it is! ".When my brother came to my cool room , " what a beautiful room " , he excaimed.We have a great mother who makes me relaxed and makes some changes in favour of me..
I HOPE U BENEFIT FROM IT
Ask God to guide me well:)