تصحيح موضوع Reemo-only
موضوعك بكل صراحه اعجبني جدا يمكن اكثر واحد ومن غير تحيز لأني حسيت بكل كلمة كتبتيها .. فعلا الحج من اجمل الرحلات اللي قضيتها في حياتي كلها اسأل الله بأن يرزقها للجميع ..
موضوعك كان تقريبا خالي من الاخطاء الا لكلمات بسيطه لذلك راح اصححه مرة وحده
تعليقي الوحيد انه الافضل قول Allah بدل قول God
علشان لو كان القاريء غير مسلم يعرف الدين اللي انتي تقصديه بالضبط ويصير عنده فضول عن معرفة مامعنى (الله)
I will never forget the greatest time that I spent in Makkah. Two years ago, my family and I went to Makkah to perform the rituals of pilgrimage. I yearned to visit Makkah and to perform the fifth pillar of the Islam. I saw many people who came from everywhere to receive their blessings from Allah. I felt comfortable and very secure in that spiritual atmosphere, as I moved from one rite to another happily. When I finished the pilgrimage ceremonies, I thanked Allah for helping me to visit Makkah and I asked him to favor me to visit it again and again.
عزيزتي عين قطر يعطيج العافيه بالنسبة لكلمة exploit فأنا أعتقد معناها يستغل يعني اللي كنت بقوله " أني أستغليت طيبة قلبك أو أستخدمتها لصالحي " فما أدري إذا كانت تصلح بهالمعنى أو لاء على كل حال مشكورة أختي على التصحيحعزيزتي عين قطر يعطيج العافيه بالنسبة لكلمة exploit فأنا أعتقد معناها يستغل يعني اللي كنت...
تصحيح موضوع اوماس عن لحظة الهام :27:
Life is short. That is the fact of life which human beings are trying to forget but I recognized it soon when I received the most painful news about my grandmother; she passed away.
البداية حلوة صحيح الجمله ثلاث كلمات بس احسها حلوة ..
المشكله طبعا في الجمله اللي بعدها حسيت انها جدا طويله وكثيرة الافكار ..
Life is short. This is a fact that human beings are trying to forget or maybe to ignore. I was one of those people until I soon understood it, when I received the most painful news about my grandmother’s death.
It is something hard to believe, it is not long ago when she was present although she was weak due to serious illness.
الموضوع بالماضي ياقلبي :)
It was something hard to believe, it wasn’t long ago when she was present although she was weak due to serious illness.
When preparing my grandmother for the burial, four members of the family accompanied her and I was one of them.
Burial صحيحه
بس اشوف لو تستخدمي كلمة
funeral
افضل
When preparing my grandmother for the funeral, four members of the family accompanied her and I was one of them.
There, she was lying peacefully with her eyes upwards and her stiff body waiting to be wrapped gently.
اه منك يااوماس سبق وذكرت لك هالخطأ ومازلت تكرريه :30:
عيوني في الانجليزي غلط انك تقولي
There
في بداية الجمله وتكون على شكل نكرة
لأن القاريء مو عارف ذير وين؟؟ لو سبق وذكرتي وين صارت الترتيبات ؟؟
على كل حال ماراح اغيرها وراح اترك فراغ محل المكان اللي تقصدينه
بقية وصفك للجمله راااااااااائع بسم الله عليك ياقلبي جدا تعبيرك قوي
There at the ( …) she was lying peacefully with her eyes upwards and her stiff body waiting to be wrapped gently.
المقطع اللي بعده تماااام مافيه اخطاء ماشاء الله
While washing her cold body, tears rolled down my cheeks when imagining the immense change her body will turn to be. Under the intense pain, I couldn't help thinking of the beautiful middle-aged widow she has been before and how much she struggled to bring up her daughters.
الجمله اللي بعدها برضو ممتااااااااااااازة
وفيها كلمتين لفتت انتباهههي
وهي
if I were
في اللغه الانجليزي معروف دايم
I
يجي معها
was
لكن هناك قاعدة شاذه واحده وهي لما تقولي (لو كنت في محل.. )
هذي هي الحالة الوحيده اللي ممكن نقول فيها
I were
وجبتيها ياقلبي مادري هل هي صدفه ولا عندك علم بالقاعده:)
A deep gloom settled on me and let me wonder what it could be if I were in her place, am I ready to confront the bad deeds I committed.
I started recalling those who have died lying deep underground with their dissolved bodies and what was their destination. Then the women's sobbing bring me to the actual moment and I was aware that it is God fatalism so God be pleased with her .
نفس تعليقي على كلمة GOD الافضل ياحلوات انه تقولواالله
في الجمله الثانيه
قلتي
Then the women's sobbing
اي امرأة ؟؟
اما انك تعرفي مين اللي صحتك من تغكيرك او انك تخلي الجمله نكره وتقولي
Then a women's sobbing
I started recalling those who have died lying deep underground with their dissolved bodies and what was their destination. Then a women's sobbing brought me back to the actual moment, and I was aware that it is Allah fatalism so may Allah shower her with his blessings and mercy...amen
قصه رائعه الله يرحم جدتك ويسكنها فسيح جناته ويرزقها الرحمة ..اللهم امين
اوماس تعبيرك بهالموضوع جدا رائع فعلا حسيت انها لحظة تستحق الحديث عنها ..
اسأل الله ين يبدل جدتك ارضا خير من ارضها واهلا خيرا من اهلا وسكننا خيرا من سكنها .. امين يارب
Life is short. That is the fact of life which human beings are trying to forget but I recognized it soon when I received the most painful news about my grandmother; she passed away.
البداية حلوة صحيح الجمله ثلاث كلمات بس احسها حلوة ..
المشكله طبعا في الجمله اللي بعدها حسيت انها جدا طويله وكثيرة الافكار ..
Life is short. This is a fact that human beings are trying to forget or maybe to ignore. I was one of those people until I soon understood it, when I received the most painful news about my grandmother’s death.
It is something hard to believe, it is not long ago when she was present although she was weak due to serious illness.
الموضوع بالماضي ياقلبي :)
It was something hard to believe, it wasn’t long ago when she was present although she was weak due to serious illness.
When preparing my grandmother for the burial, four members of the family accompanied her and I was one of them.
Burial صحيحه
بس اشوف لو تستخدمي كلمة
funeral
افضل
When preparing my grandmother for the funeral, four members of the family accompanied her and I was one of them.
There, she was lying peacefully with her eyes upwards and her stiff body waiting to be wrapped gently.
اه منك يااوماس سبق وذكرت لك هالخطأ ومازلت تكرريه :30:
عيوني في الانجليزي غلط انك تقولي
There
في بداية الجمله وتكون على شكل نكرة
لأن القاريء مو عارف ذير وين؟؟ لو سبق وذكرتي وين صارت الترتيبات ؟؟
على كل حال ماراح اغيرها وراح اترك فراغ محل المكان اللي تقصدينه
بقية وصفك للجمله راااااااااائع بسم الله عليك ياقلبي جدا تعبيرك قوي
There at the ( …) she was lying peacefully with her eyes upwards and her stiff body waiting to be wrapped gently.
المقطع اللي بعده تماااام مافيه اخطاء ماشاء الله
While washing her cold body, tears rolled down my cheeks when imagining the immense change her body will turn to be. Under the intense pain, I couldn't help thinking of the beautiful middle-aged widow she has been before and how much she struggled to bring up her daughters.
الجمله اللي بعدها برضو ممتااااااااااااازة
وفيها كلمتين لفتت انتباهههي
وهي
if I were
في اللغه الانجليزي معروف دايم
I
يجي معها
was
لكن هناك قاعدة شاذه واحده وهي لما تقولي (لو كنت في محل.. )
هذي هي الحالة الوحيده اللي ممكن نقول فيها
I were
وجبتيها ياقلبي مادري هل هي صدفه ولا عندك علم بالقاعده:)
A deep gloom settled on me and let me wonder what it could be if I were in her place, am I ready to confront the bad deeds I committed.
I started recalling those who have died lying deep underground with their dissolved bodies and what was their destination. Then the women's sobbing bring me to the actual moment and I was aware that it is God fatalism so God be pleased with her .
نفس تعليقي على كلمة GOD الافضل ياحلوات انه تقولواالله
في الجمله الثانيه
قلتي
Then the women's sobbing
اي امرأة ؟؟
اما انك تعرفي مين اللي صحتك من تغكيرك او انك تخلي الجمله نكره وتقولي
Then a women's sobbing
I started recalling those who have died lying deep underground with their dissolved bodies and what was their destination. Then a women's sobbing brought me back to the actual moment, and I was aware that it is Allah fatalism so may Allah shower her with his blessings and mercy...amen
قصه رائعه الله يرحم جدتك ويسكنها فسيح جناته ويرزقها الرحمة ..اللهم امين
اوماس تعبيرك بهالموضوع جدا رائع فعلا حسيت انها لحظة تستحق الحديث عنها ..
اسأل الله ين يبدل جدتك ارضا خير من ارضها واهلا خيرا من اهلا وسكننا خيرا من سكنها .. امين يارب
عزيزتي عين قطر يعطيج العافيه بالنسبة لكلمة exploit فأنا أعتقد معناها يستغل يعني اللي كنت بقوله " أني أستغليت طيبة قلبك أو أستخدمتها لصالحي " فما أدري إذا كانت تصلح بهالمعنى أو لاء على كل حال مشكورة أختي على التصحيحعزيزتي عين قطر يعطيج العافيه بالنسبة لكلمة exploit فأنا أعتقد معناها يستغل يعني اللي كنت...
تصحيح الغالية سمية (لحظة الهام)
My Father come back to the Life again by the volition of Allah...
One day and more specifically at the Friday that happened in my life a pain event.
بعد التعديل
My Father came back the Life again by the volition of Allah...
عزيزتي انتِ قلتي
في يوم من الايام وبالتحديد يوم الجمعه
كان افضل لو كنت ذكرت تاريخ الحادثه كونك قلتي انك راح تكوني دقيقه ..
One day and more specifically on a Friday a painful event occurred on my life.
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اللي بعدها
The event started by going my father at 7:00 clock to the garden and makes some of works but during his working, suddenly fall a block on his head.
بعد التعديل
It all started when my father went early morning to the garden to finish up some work. All of a sudden, a block fell right on his head.
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After that, my father became covering by his blood and retains to us in the house. After his entering to the house, he fall in the unconscious state.
بعد التعديل
After that, my father was all covered by his blood and retained to us in the house. As soon as he entered the house he fell in the unconscious state.
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After we watching the scene, we all crying around him cause we think that my was die. But the pain state at the same moment that we don’t had any big brother to carry my father to the hospital and we don’t had any numbers of our nigue.
بعد التعديل
After we watched that horrible scene, we were all crying around him because we thought that my father was dying. What made it worse is that we didn’t have any older brother; neither do we carry the number of any neighbors.
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And during that moment, I was have a lot of sad ideas of how we can live after the death of my father. Also, the weeping of my mother, young brother and sister adds the state to the worst.
بعد التعديل
And during that moment, I was having a lot of depressing ideas of how we can live after the death of my father. Also, the weeping of my mother, young brother and sister adds to the worst.
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Suddenly, my father get up and saying( what happened, what are you doing)). In this moment I cannot express my feeling that my father come back to the life again by the volition of Allah and I was live in a unbelievable moment that my father going to us again.
بعد التعديل
Suddenly, my father got up and said, “what happened, what are you doing”. At that moment I couldn’t express my feelings that my father come back to the life again by the volition of Allah. I was living in an unbelievable moment that my father going to be with us again.
After that, I thanked my great Allah on his grace and I believed that any person in this life will life until a specific time and I was remember the speech of the rising Allah'' When their moment of the death is coming, they don’t late or coming to the front even one hour.
مافهمت قصدك بالاخير ياقلبي بس حاولت بقدر الاماكن اعدل الجمله
After that, I thanked my great Allah on his grace blessings on my family. It was then I realized any person will live whatever numbers of days Allah wants him to live for. And no matter what we do, we cannot postpone or rush the day of the death not even one hour.
تم بحمد الله ..
عزيزتي سميه موضوعك جدا رائع وفعلا لحظة مخيفه الله يطول لكم بعمر الوالد
الا ماقلتي لنا وش صار بعدين؟؟
رحتوا المستشفى ورجع زي اول ان شاء الله :)
My Father come back to the Life again by the volition of Allah...
One day and more specifically at the Friday that happened in my life a pain event.
بعد التعديل
My Father came back the Life again by the volition of Allah...
عزيزتي انتِ قلتي
في يوم من الايام وبالتحديد يوم الجمعه
كان افضل لو كنت ذكرت تاريخ الحادثه كونك قلتي انك راح تكوني دقيقه ..
One day and more specifically on a Friday a painful event occurred on my life.
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اللي بعدها
The event started by going my father at 7:00 clock to the garden and makes some of works but during his working, suddenly fall a block on his head.
بعد التعديل
It all started when my father went early morning to the garden to finish up some work. All of a sudden, a block fell right on his head.
---------------------------------
After that, my father became covering by his blood and retains to us in the house. After his entering to the house, he fall in the unconscious state.
بعد التعديل
After that, my father was all covered by his blood and retained to us in the house. As soon as he entered the house he fell in the unconscious state.
---------------------------------
After we watching the scene, we all crying around him cause we think that my was die. But the pain state at the same moment that we don’t had any big brother to carry my father to the hospital and we don’t had any numbers of our nigue.
بعد التعديل
After we watched that horrible scene, we were all crying around him because we thought that my father was dying. What made it worse is that we didn’t have any older brother; neither do we carry the number of any neighbors.
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And during that moment, I was have a lot of sad ideas of how we can live after the death of my father. Also, the weeping of my mother, young brother and sister adds the state to the worst.
بعد التعديل
And during that moment, I was having a lot of depressing ideas of how we can live after the death of my father. Also, the weeping of my mother, young brother and sister adds to the worst.
-------------------------------------------------
Suddenly, my father get up and saying( what happened, what are you doing)). In this moment I cannot express my feeling that my father come back to the life again by the volition of Allah and I was live in a unbelievable moment that my father going to us again.
بعد التعديل
Suddenly, my father got up and said, “what happened, what are you doing”. At that moment I couldn’t express my feelings that my father come back to the life again by the volition of Allah. I was living in an unbelievable moment that my father going to be with us again.
After that, I thanked my great Allah on his grace and I believed that any person in this life will life until a specific time and I was remember the speech of the rising Allah'' When their moment of the death is coming, they don’t late or coming to the front even one hour.
مافهمت قصدك بالاخير ياقلبي بس حاولت بقدر الاماكن اعدل الجمله
After that, I thanked my great Allah on his grace blessings on my family. It was then I realized any person will live whatever numbers of days Allah wants him to live for. And no matter what we do, we cannot postpone or rush the day of the death not even one hour.
تم بحمد الله ..
عزيزتي سميه موضوعك جدا رائع وفعلا لحظة مخيفه الله يطول لكم بعمر الوالد
الا ماقلتي لنا وش صار بعدين؟؟
رحتوا المستشفى ورجع زي اول ان شاء الله :)
الصفحة الأخيرة
One of the most inspirational moments effect in my life when I was lonely in our house, my parents and brothers were go to out.
الجمله طويله جدا!! عزيزتي حاولي تقطعيها بنقطه ..
مثلا ممكن تذكري متى حدث هالشيء؟؟
راح احط توقيت من عندي واقول قبل اسبوعين
استخدامك لكلمة lonely خاطيء
عزيزتي lonely تعني انك تشعري بالوحده
اما لو حابه تقولي انه كنت وحيده في البيت تقولي alone
One of the most inspirational moments in my life occurred two weeks ago. I was all alone at home; my entire family was gone out somewhere.
الجمله اللي بعدها
Nothing I do except watching TV, I close that and I sat think in silent, I imagined myself in the tomb nothing with me to pleasure, no friends and no relative.
نفس المشكله عزيزتي
الجمله طويله جدا .. اي جمله تتعدا سطر ونصف معناها طويله لازم اما تختصريها او تقسميها جملتين
ايضا استخدامك لكلمة tomb خاطيء
لانها تعني (تابوت) اذا كان قصدك (القبر) فتقولي GRAVE
ايضا معنى اخر لكلمة tombstone هو الحجرة اللي يضعها الكفار على القبر
راح اعدل الجمله واقسمها نصين لاحظي كيف ياقلبي
I was doing nothing but watching TV, when I suddenly just turned off the TV, and closed my eyes in silence. I started to think about the day when I will be all alone in a dark grave, nobody with me to pleasure, no friends and no relative, nobody.
اللي بعدها
Nothing with me except a good deed, my tears drop in my face how is my deed? If my deeds were good, it will be as friends or relative who pleasure my lonely in the otherworld.
عدلت الجمله شوي
I thought about how nothing is going to be with me other than my good deeds. At that moment, my tears were falling down my cheeks, am I ready for the big day? How are my deeds? Have I worked hard enough to light up the darkness at that lonely place? These questions and more came up to my mind during that inspirational moment of my life.