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الله يعطيها الصحة و العافية . بلغيها سلامنا.

الله يفرج عليها ويردها لنا قريباً

السلام عليكم
كيفكم يااخواتي جميعا بلا استثناء

نتمنى لاختي ساد فلاور ان ترجع بالسلامة

وبالنسبة للموضوع انتظروني جايتكم

السلام عليكم
كيفك غاليتي رنيم
this is my writing and i hope it get your admiration

My Father come back to the Life again by the volition of Allah...

One day and more specifically at the Friday that happened in my life a pain event. The event started by going my father at 7:00 clock to the garden and makes some of works but during his working, suddenly fall a block on his head. After that, my father became covering by his blood and retains to us in the house. After his entering to the house, he fall in the unconscious state. After we watching the scene, we all crying around him cause we think that my was die. But the pain state at the same moment that we don’t had any big brother to carry my father to the hospital and we don’t had any numbers of our nigue. And during that moment, I was have a lot of sad ideas of how we can live after the death of my father. Also, the weeping of my mother, young brother and sister adds the state to the worst. Suddenly, my father get up and saying( what happened, what are you doing)). In this moment I cannot express my feeling that my father come back to the life again by the volition of Allah and I was live in a unbelievable moment that my father going to us again. After that, I thanked my great Allah on his grace and I believed that any person in this life will life until a specific time and I was remember the speech of the rising Allah'' When their moment of the death is coming, they don’t late or coming to the front even one hour.

تصحيح موضوع الغاليه دانة عمان
موضوع (((لحظة الهااام))


One day I and my family were coming back from a vacation in the UAE by our car.

استخدامك لـ I and my family خاطيء
اما تقولي my family and I
او تقولي me and my family

بقية الجمله رتبتها شوية وحذفت انكم مسافرين بالسيارة لأنه الموضوع راح يوضح هالشيء

One day my family and I were traveling back from a vacation we spent in UAE.

الجمله اللي بعدها

It was about 4:30A.M. All my family was sleeping except me and my father.

لما حابه تقولي عن شخص انه نايم تقولي asleep
وبقية الجمله رتبتها شوية

It was about 4:30A.M where all my family were asleep during the ride except for my dad, the driver, and I.

الجمله اللي بعدها
My father was driving the car and I was looking through the window of the car.
عدلت شوية بالجمله
Since my father was busy driving I tried to get busy looking through the window of the car.



الجمله اللي بعدها
I was looking at the dark that covers the high mountains between the border of Oman and the UAE.

لاحظت انك استخدمت كلمة looking كثير مع انها كلمة لها الكثير من البدائل مثل
stare
gaze
glance

I was staring at the dark sky that covers the high mountains between the border of Oman and the UAE.


الجمله اللي بعدها
While I was looking through the window I noticed the light of the dawn when it was spreading gently.
بعد التعديل والفواصل
While I was looking, I noticed the light of the dawn when it was spreading gently.

الجمله اللي بعدها
And the dark was disappearing from the high mountains. The view was marvelous.

لاحظي انك كتبتي جمل قصيرة
ايضا مدري ليش حاسه انه استخدامك لكلمة marvelous
كثييييييير
مع انها ايضا من الكلمات اللي لها كثير من البدائل مثل

extraordinary,
fantastic,
improbable,
incredible,
, miraculous,
supernatural,
terrific
, tremendous,
unbelievable,
wonderful,
wondrous

The dark was peacefully disappearing from the high mountains, the view was spectacular.


الجمله اللي بعدها
At that moment I felt that it was the birth of new life. It was the first time when I saw the dark disappearing. It was the inspirational moment in my life.0

عدلت الجمله بحيث تصير اكثر شاعرية

At that moment I felt that it was the birth of a new day, a new life, and most importantly a new me! Truthfully, that scene marked one of the greatest inspirational moments in my life.



لحظة شاعرية قمة في الالهام ..شكرا لمشاركتها معنا غاليتي :39:

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